Feedback from Amar

Since our rough cut we have been editing in every lesson. With our sequence nearly ready we decided to get feedback from Amar as he is experienced and knows what works well and what doesn't in opening sequences.
At first he believed that the narrative was about a murder investigator rather than a murderer. This is because of the use of pictures and newspaper articles with the time and dates on the wall. It seemed as if they were investigating suspects rather than following potential victims. The spying part of the sequence created a suspicion that the man was not "normal" and possibly not a investigator. As soon as the knife was seen he instantly understood that the character was a murderer choosing his victims.
After trying to explain the narrative he thought was being portrayed in the sequence we told him the actual narrative. He felt that it was hard to grasp the deep narrative we had produced and we could have tried to show the boys relationship with his dad in some shots. He suggested having a close up picture of his dad as well as having a close up with his face so the audience could relate with the character more. He thought that the newspaper article on the wall could have been shown more close up to make sure the audience can understand the narrative we were trying to portray.
For the spy sequence he felt that black and white was not enough to convince him that it was a flashback and suggested that it would be a good idea to add another effect such as vignette. This blurs out the edges of the clip making it more realistic as a flashback.
He felt the music went well with the pictures on screen and related to the sub genre well. He also felt that the editing was very strong however he thought one weakness in our sequence was the way we showed the titles. He felt that they could have been a different colour, possibly a lighter/brighter colour as it would relate to the production logo we made. He also felt that the production title should be moved away from the middle of the screen as it meant that there was less emphasis on the character in shot which is not what we want to show.
Lastly he thought that the music at the start should fade in rather than suddenly start. This is because the production logo suddenly jumped to the opening sequence which looked a bit unproffesional.